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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/20/2008 1:49:42 PM
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1love1God1way
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Round Two:
You are the voice which dances in the breeze; in life, breath, and love and whispers to me, "I will carry your heart. I will carry it in mine."
just to be clear because of what I'm about to say... I'm happily married. haha. but I have a question...
are you married? if not, why not? cuz you got this romance thing down!
you should write something about the great romance between Christ and his Bride. I know there is alot of stuff out there. But you may just have a fresh and effective approach to expressing it, a talent that could really reach into the heart of ppl. Are you working on any such projects at the moment?
Haha!
No, I am not married. But thank you for the encouraging words!
I do write poetry. My poetry is, what I call at least, neo-impressionistic. I post my works online, but do hope that someday, if I get better, to be able to publish in a book.
You can read them HERE.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/20/2008 2:04:52 PM
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endless_night
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Awww, thanks Shelagirl.
I came up with something else for the OP:
I am a murderer. I picked up the stone and cast it at the sinner. I have no regrets about the death of this one, if only the mirror didn’t get in my way.
< Message edited by endless_night -- 6/20/2008 4:35:13 PM >
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/20/2008 2:35:59 PM
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selahgirl
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oh my goodness... yours is the most beautiful poetry I have heard since college... perhaps ever.
I am going to coin a new phrase, at least I've never heard it before, but you are the beginning of a whole distinct genre of... indie-poets
ur work is quite unique and breathtaking.
I am forwarding the link to my husband and several friends.
will definitely be promoting your poetry to ppl, and I strongly encourage you to get it into book form of some kind. I would definitely buy a copy. Do you have a myspace of ur work, or something on myccm.org I know it's not music per se, but I could easily see you incorporating some songwriting into your writing.
wow
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/20/2008 2:58:49 PM
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selahgirl
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okay a google search shows that the phrase is already out there... but it lacks defining. So let's define it, shall we, or perhaps you already have...
indie not as in music, not as in being independent of a record label. Rather indie as independent and standing alone -- at a distance from the norm, peculiar, noticeable, uniquely skewed and memorable. I have seen similar breaking techniques used... but not with the skill and flavor that you have demonstrated. It was always a favorite technique of mine in college (many years ago)... but you truly have a gift for it.
sorry, I know I'm going on about it but I am truly overwhelmed by the depth and imagery of your writing. Therefore I see you as an indie-poet being vastly different from the term used in the music world.
and to think all this time I thought you were just another writer with an interesting avatar. haha.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/20/2008 3:36:17 PM
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Selah,
Wow. I am quite overwhelmed by your response!
I have added you as a friend on myspace. My name is Ben.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/20/2008 4:44:58 PM
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Won,
Thank you for posting this, I really enjoyed this exercise.
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Psalms 111:10
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/20/2008 10:06:23 PM
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Let’s sit back and watch as tolerance completely demoralized our entire existence. Rebellion only helps our cause. So, close your eyes you fool, you’re too weak to stop it.
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The Fear of the LORD is the beginning of wisdom; A good understanding have all those who do His commandments. His praises endures forever.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/21/2008 12:09:41 PM
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selahgirl
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She watched him as he warmed the conversation in the room, his gentle presence drifting like a playful breeze as he stirred smiles and caused laughter to gracefully dance so freely. He was beautiful.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/23/2008 8:04:58 AM
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You. Your perfectly peculiar heavy smile cannot lie behind your broken eyes. That terror, that blade, that fist, should have loved you like I do, dear.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/23/2008 11:01:38 AM
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... and then she was no more. His were the last eyes to look upon that smile that had caused the minds of men to lose themselves in wonder, to stall their breathing, captivated, vulnerable...
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/23/2008 12:53:41 PM
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MJ Lit up a cigarette as she stood on the roof of a building looking over the city below. the Neonlights and headlights of cars glittered below people just going through thier lives with no idea of what was coming.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/26/2008 1:18:30 AM
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Round Three. . . the last two have been about love. This one is about pain.
Your curled lips lie; I won't listen. Your eyes cut; I am frozen in death. Slip another pill into my drink, darling. The poison has already killed me within.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/26/2008 1:24:28 AM
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This was the first time in their marriage where he actually came to bed with her.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/26/2008 10:59:20 AM
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The dregs of the person I loved remain. The sound of her sweet voice on the phone with another is not the harsh harping she gives to me. I'm outside.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/26/2008 2:48:39 PM
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We have cats. We've always has cats. Now am sure you remember the difference between dogs and cats. Dogs have owners. Cats have staff.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 6/26/2008 3:04:38 PM
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I stared at the empty chair. The room was quiet, not even a ticking clock. My body sat frozen--unwilling to move. The monstrous, ugly spider on the chair, daring me.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 7/3/2008 11:30:11 AM
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Maren’s breath came in short gasps. He cautioned a quick glance behind and could see the shadows growing larger. The temple guards were gaining and their boots thundered against the polished stone floor.
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It is part of a bigger project- but this is the actual opening of it.
I agree with previous poster, this is a fun thread!
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 7/4/2008 12:35:54 AM
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Rubs hands together and grins magnanimously "I have hundreds of these things this is how I find my creativity and inspire myself and develope my characters. Here is one of my favs."
“Myethella, my sweet, fear not. I may be the perfect predator but that also makes me the perfect protector as I strive to be perfect in everything I do.”
and another one cuz I can't resist
“Ah, music the connector of souls, tread carefully my love lest you irrevocably attach your heart to something you were not expecting.”
What about...
“I can only give you clues as to who and what I am, your heart must make the connections on its own.”
Or...
“I see the truth glimmering in your eyes, they reflect your soul allowing all who would search for it too see your innermost reasoning’s.”
and My Personal Fav...
“Anticipation is almost if not more satisfying than the actual culmination of the event, don’t you agree?”
LOL I actually have a folder called Quotes in which I take my most beautific moments or thoughts as they strike me and write them down. Then I write the story around the quote like a blanket around and infant who will develope into something strong and inexplicable in its intricacies. Are we allowed to post more than one cuz I wanna post all of 'em. lol Most of them are dialogue my characters would say to each other, but I do have several of captured moments. I must say you guys are unbelievably talented I was held and caught by every single post I read, in fact looking back it takes physical effort to tear my eyes away from some they are so moving. I didn't read the rules so I can delete this if its to big or much or off subject lol.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 7/4/2008 3:23:13 AM
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selahgirl
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wow, these are all quite good.
I don't know the rules very well, but I enjoyed reading all of them.
^_^
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 7/4/2008 5:44:55 AM
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Click, click, click. Boots echoed through the hall, interrupting my concentration. I scowled up to see who the perpertrator was...but then got a shock! It was my long lost....
He he
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 7/4/2008 7:08:17 AM
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The only survivor in the world! The vapor killed all except him. He flung himself from the Eiffel Tower. As he fell to his death he heard a phone ring!
(From my next book, hopefully).
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 7/7/2008 10:01:13 PM
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“Who cut your hair?” I rolled my eyes. “The lady who electrocuted a long haired feral cat, added some blonde highlights, and stapled it to the top of her head.”
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 7/7/2008 10:14:44 PM
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Nancy knew she was in trouble when Phil's head exploded.
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RE: Hook Me in 30 Words or Less - 7/8/2008 12:15:41 AM
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selahgirl
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hahahaha ^_^
Weaselofdoom, I would read the intro of a story with this lead-in, just because it's so wonderfully bizarre.
Kinda makes the reader take a double take and gasp out loud, "wait a minute... now what did that just say?"
I luv it!
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