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RE: Share what you've written - 10/12/2005 6:17:29 AM
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Konstantinos
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poor Travis.
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/16/2005 9:11:32 PM
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c'mon people... post!
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/16/2005 9:28:37 PM
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o lala!
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/16/2005 11:41:04 PM
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don't feel like doin homework... humm some possible exucse: I was late to school Because my mule broke his leg on a giant keg and for a ride I had to beg...? Umm... the dog ate my math...! yeah Sis put my lit in the... um BATH!? Yeah that's a poem... lol! Maybe I should just do my homework. (don't know if teachers would fall for that) although one time my cat shreaded up my math worksheet and I had to take a photo of it for the teach and do it over... lol ~POODLE~
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/17/2005 8:25:52 PM
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okay, Gil, here it is... I wrote this song pretty recently. and it's kind of long... but yeah. it's this idea that I've had for a while that's grown from some conversations with friends about the nature of true love. we have such a disney-oriented culture, with this idea of love being this wonderful thing that happens when you're infatuated with someone. and the idea that after twenty years of marriage if you don't feel like newlyweds there's something wrong with your relationship. the actuality that lifelong love only comes from growing together with the other person is so far removed from our reality. and there's that... but also, sometimes I just think "I just want a chance to actually love somebody!" I feel so ready for that kind of commitment; I really want it a lot. and I've tried for a while to write a poem about it, but I just couldn't organize it all properly. so it definitely turned into a song. but yeah... no title. maybe "love". I'm actually kind of unhappy with the last line of the first chorus (each one changes slightly), but I can't find anything that I like with the right amount of syllables, so for now it works. my heart is longing for a chance to blossom and to grow beyond the regions I have known in this my lonely state of existence my heart is capable of loving it's waiting to absorb and give the love I want much more than I could possibly put into words I want to know love forget simplistic infatuation the childish ideals we all cling to of love growing from being enamored with someone when really it grows from two hearts sharing life with each other love's so much deeper than feelings could measure and I'm ready for it to know the feeling of forever to look into your eyes and say "I love you" and to realize it means so much more than a friendship to really truly love you and not just the idea of loving you but something real something tangible I can hold on to I want to know love forget simplistic infatuation the childish ideals we all cling to of love meaning always admiring your lover or feeling the same way towards her as the day you first met love isn't stagnant, it grows and it changes us right along with it we sing about it write about it seach for it in everything dream about it fight about it but do we know what it really means? I want to know love not just simplistic infatuation the cheap imitations I'm offered of love being this cosmic mysterious stranger or worse, nothing more than a bed shared between two companions love is commitment, not champagne and roses are you ready for it?
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/19/2005 1:38:45 PM
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Yay for valuing commitment and determination, action with thought, over "simplistic infatuation." I loved it, Lyd. Here's what happens when I get melodramatic: Pen and Prose and the Rain Tonight It's dark, still and raining a night much like the one that saw us torn apart Hey, I might dislike change but do you love it enough to see me written out of every script and page? I torment and love and think so much of me goes into wishing you well oh but do you think of me? As I write to ease and help the flow of painful eagerness from myself- would you care that i write? Do you wish to see what I write? I would give so much for you to love that I sit that I anguish that I write. If I could write you into being the very stuff of my dreams there would be not much of a change your face would be fair still your build not quite tall but dear The only alteration would be the shape of your arms- they would arc to fit my form your eyes would see the world- wet now, a layer of rain to plaster gold and red and brown pieces of summer to the cold and bitter laughing ground- and they would see its beauty built to showcase my every thought. Ohhh the tender shape of your lips they would part slighlty smile slightly sigh slightly welcoming my sight. Not much would be different but everything would lift.... colours would be not of death but of the dearest season. You know you don't know If you can see life forever with me in it- But how do you see so easily a life with me forever absent? Every time you think of life beyond what we have for each other you banish me to my imagination this horrid place with pen and paper and prose seperating me from my fullest dreams. I have a few others that I like the titles of, but I can't share because they're too personal: Everything I Love and Hate Here, and Harmony and Entropy.
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/19/2005 5:01:17 PM
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(((whisper))) I really liked that poem. It showed your feelings so well that it made my heart ache for you.
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/19/2005 5:55:54 PM
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ORIGINAL: greenish okay, Gil, here it is... I wrote this song pretty recently. and it's kind of long... but yeah. it's this idea that I've had for a while that's grown from some conversations with friends about the nature of true love. we have such a disney-oriented culture, with this idea of love being this wonderful thing that happens when you're infatuated with someone. and the idea that after twenty years of marriage if you don't feel like newlyweds there's something wrong with your relationship. the actuality that lifelong love only comes from growing together with the other person is so far removed from our reality. and there's that... but also, sometimes I just think "I just want a chance to actually love somebody!" I feel so ready for that kind of commitment; I really want it a lot. and I've tried for a while to write a poem about it, but I just couldn't organize it all properly. so it definitely turned into a song. but yeah... no title. maybe "love". I'm actually kind of unhappy with the last line of the first chorus (each one changes slightly), but I can't find anything that I like with the right amount of syllables, so for now it works. my heart is longing for a chance to blossom and to grow beyond the regions I have known in this my lonely state of existence my heart is capable of loving it's waiting to absorb and give the love I want much more than I could possibly put into words I want to know love forget simplistic infatuation the childish ideals we all cling to of love growing from being enamored with someone when really it grows from two hearts sharing life with each other love's so much deeper than feelings could measure and I'm ready for it to know the feeling of forever to look into your eyes and say "I love you" and to realize it means so much more than a friendship to really truly love you and not just the idea of loving you but something real something tangible I can hold on to I want to know love forget simplistic infatuation the childish ideals we all cling to of love meaning always admiring your lover or feeling the same way towards her as the day you first met love isn't stagnant, it grows and it changes us right along with it we sing about it write about it seach for it in everything dream about it fight about it but do we know what it really means? I want to know love not just simplistic infatuation the cheap imitations I'm offered of love being this cosmic mysterious stranger or worse, nothing more than a bed shared between two companions love is commitment, not champagne and roses are you ready for it? I love this
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/22/2005 12:38:24 AM
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iceywarm leaves of green fun, frolicking, fabulous Spring
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/22/2005 12:27:13 PM
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Took me a while to find one that I kind of like.. :-P Beautiful I smile as you look at me It feels as if everything were exposed I don't mind, because I trust you I long for your eyes to stay looking in to mine forever You make me feel beautiful You laugh and smile I do the same What is time when I'm with you I wish forever could be spent like this You make me feel beautiful I dance and sing You watch and then join in Life is just a happy poem You and me creating the best story You make me feel beautiful More and more I'm with you Becoming part of you and you part of me It's a love that's binding and strong As you speak and tell me your heart, I realize That I am, indeed beautiful
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/22/2005 1:25:31 PM
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And I really like that haiku? Purity.... I'm really bad at remembering the structure to those smaller forms!!
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/23/2005 3:26:53 AM
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I like some of your poems. I love poems about God and His love I've writen a few, but I'm not good at poetry so don't expect much. Believe 02-28-05 The Lord will come to you, no matter what. He will save you, no ands ifs or buts. All that he asks is that you believe. Believe that he is real and that he loves you an me. Believe with all your heart that he died for you. And tell him that you believe the bible is true. Ask him to forgive you and live in your heart. And the Son will come free you, and never will he part. After this is completed, your free now, you’re done. Jesus will always protect you from the evil one. And now, dear friend, know this as well. You will never have to set foot in that firey place called Hell. For Heaven is your new home, a grand place for you to stay. The Lord created it for you, and this I will pray. That amongst all the beauty, the love and the glee. We will meet again up there, and for all eternity. Hold your new savior close to your heart. Love him deeply and truly, and he will never part. copyright FG
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/23/2005 3:37:01 AM
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Here's a poem I wrote tonight. Not the greatest, but oh well. I rarely like my poems. Longing to Give my love runs so deep i just long to offer a piece of myself anything to make you happy yet all i do is never enough in my own eyes i’m so envious of you i wish so badly that i could touch you the way you touch me but i could never match you you may not see things the same way but my bitter heart says i’m not enough
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/31/2005 12:14:23 AM
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Trouble Is the trouble is learning to lead when what I want to do is lean You see me as dependable predictable sturdy, your girl but not your love because you lost that long ago it has slowly diffused melted into comfort from passion into you and me from us and your smile still takes me but I can't let myself drift too far because I need to go about this business of industry and inferiority on my own. Matinee Dark movie theatres are dangerous places when there's only an armrest in between me and what I desire the most between me and what frustrates me the most. I want to strangle him then kiss him- I want to be able to walk away from him maybe make a scene and spill his rootbeer but if I'm honest I'm closer to closing my eyes breathing in the familiar scent, loving it. Why do I have to love the darkness the closeness to someone who has already chosen? It is a guilty pleasure, a lonely meeting both for you and me. You love the proximity but not the commitment I just full out love the man beside me. So we sit- we don't touch, but we both want to. A matinee of a movie neither of us wanted to see a few old men sitting scattered alone in the rows in front of us. I sigh.
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RE: Share what you've written - 11/3/2005 11:52:43 PM
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Writing is such a release for me. I write about the situation I feel I can't let go, and then when it's cemented in journal and poem, I pray for the release and forgiveness I desire. So there is a lot that I have written that would lead one to believe I'm a bit of a melodramatic maniac. But bear with the relational poetry. I'm in a big transition phase of my life and I often need to write to let go. Expense Stability at an expense. Love scorned for a summer's pay In some no name town- A safe distance from your life's desire, from that beautiful mystery of the insecurable; A heart beating in independence from your own. Cast Off "I really enjoy this" you hold my hand smile sadly you've already decided against the union, against the future fear stands in this strangely infinite space between your dear sad face and mine. "I really miss you" spoken wishfully. I think so often of the times the words that warmed my core brought colour to my cold cheeks and feeling to my toes. You speak of love, of happiness and even now you're letting go figuratively of course but the grip you've placed on my fingers is only the final grasp of a stone to be thrown a burden cast off. The pain in your eyes- i don't understand this finality this is what you have chosen. Your certainty is matched with my furvour and this painful goodbye is set to repeat itself in the dark theatre of nights spent alone. City Lights I wonder why the city lights always shimmer from a distance coming close they are nothing but dirty luminescent spheres there is nothing mystical in the way they burn but from a distance they are stars and they remind me of you and of the night they palely lit your face as you told me you couldn't be mine. Perfect Love It is not truly love until it is love without fear of loss. Do I believe this? You say again perfect love drives fear away. Love is perfect. Can I be loved perfectly?
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RE: Share what you've written - 11/4/2005 3:09:29 AM
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Awww, whisper, those are beautiful. (((((Whisper)))))
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RE: Share what you've written - 11/4/2005 8:06:06 AM
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There are alot of beautiful poetry here!! Here are mine. Although it is not good, some of them I like, my style tends to be rhyming, so... enjoy . I have one more, but it's Marian and long, so these are sufficient. I Thank Thee, Lord I thank Thee, Lord, for many things which Thou hast given me: My breath, that waketh me each day, Mine eyes, that I can see. I thank Thee for mine ears, O Lord, That hear Thy peace on Earth, And for my mouth to bring Thee praise in sadness and in mirth. I thank Thee for mine hands, O Lord, that they may lift in prayer, And for my knees, that they may kneel in humble love and care. I thank Thee for my legs and feet upon Thy holy ground, And for mine head to rise in faith, when hardships bring me down. I thank Thee for my body, Thy reflection men do see And in my final hour, Lord, may I return to Thee. I thank Thee, Lord, that Love can fill this little heart of mine, But most of all, I thank Thee that forever, I am Thine. Lullaby The stillness of the passing river, Throughout the valleys and mountains green, Carries the passive moon of silver As the bright reflection does flicker The vivid rays of a moonlit stream. And then the moon bids its own farewell And disappears in the dawning sky. The morning light lures a magic spell Of twilight as the charm shall quell The spirits of the mortal realm so nigh. The sun peaks into the break of day To paint the world a brilliant gold As hope and love flow in every way And happiness sings the night away As children of the earth unfold. The dusk ascends as day becomes slumber In which the wind sings an ancient song, A melody of of ambient wonder To lull a child from endless thunder, For in the stillness, nothing goes wrong. Sleep, my child, among stars in the air And let the wind carry every dream, Where life is joyful, mirthful and fair Within the safe arms in which I bear, And forever, peace shall smile and beam. Amazing Is This Love of His Amazing is this love of His, That He should die for all, As He atoned for every sin By every strike and fall. So destined for this Roman death, We wonder at this loss As Jesus walked on Calvary To bear His wooden cross. Along this road, His knees gave way And Jesus then fell down. But soldiers watched His every step And pulled Him from the ground. He saw His mother crying so, That death would take her Son. But deep within, all knew from there, He was the Chosen One. Barefoot upon the solid earth, Our Simon helped on trail, And sweet and dear Veronica Then wiped His face by veil. He fell again, but quickly rose As counsel never came, And gave His comfort to the women Grieving just the same. Much closer to the foot of death, He fell for one more time, And by His strength, He reached the top To die for love sublime. The soldiers stripped His garments off And laid His body down Upon the solid, wooden cross That rested on the ground. With every nail, He took the pain And blood ran from each hand. The thorns that pierced His holy head Was placed in their demand. If He was crowned with thorns for me, Then kings of earth should flee, For none are worthy by His Love That set us captives free. At last, the cross was raised up high, That tree that held His life. His spirit left His body and He died to end all strife. His body then, was taken down, Entombed by all who mourned In hopes that God took care of Him When He was mocked and scorned. Then Jesus rose from death's cold hands And He did live again As testimony of His kingdom 'Mongst all sinning men. Behold, our Christ victorious As Royal Majesty, For this fulfilled the scripture of His death on Calvary. Amazing is this love of His, That He should die for all, As He atoned for every sin By every strike and fall. So destined for this Roman death, We wonder at this loss As Jesus walked on Calvary To bear His wooden cross. Fallen Revelation I thought about the Lord each night and what He planned for me, But I just couldn't place of where my life was meant to be And so I came to church one night, and kneeled right down and prayed, And by the Holy Spirit's sight, I saw the ones unsaved. In the vigil of my prayers, I began to think in dread, For God sent me impressions of all sinners to my head. Their wickedness, iniquities, and emptiness they'd keep And filled with my compassion, my devotion made me weep. I saw the peoples all around the world in Satan's bond; This was a Hell within the Earth that all had looked upon. The sins of Sodom and Gomorrah rose into its reign, As darkness taught their hearts to fear, and dwell in what was bane. I saw the rapists' pleasure and their wicked, chosen fate, And saw the bombing warheads of the nations filled with hate, The children and their grieving, left abandoned there to die In lands diseased with famine's plague; I heard my own heart cry. The gamblers I have seen, corrupted from their riches vast, Knew not with Jesus Christ, that earthly treasures never last. Their hearts were full of emptiness, and never satisfied, And yet they took up frailties of their greedy selfish pride. I saw the ones intoxicated, poisoned in surprise, And saw the many, tangled in their giant web of lies. The youth became deceived by him, the prince of Hell's domain And by the Tempter's influence, his darkness would remain. The bloodshed and the murders struck a chord inside my heart, For wickedness held strong to them with vengeance playing part. Corrupted ones, the cheaters and the liars had no guilt And men with these foundations are destroyed from whence they're built. And then I saw these fortune tellers, thinking that it's right To use these tools of Satan, finding futures through insight. There's witchcraft working through our world; they praise their gods of stone, And practice magic incantations God detests alone. The scent of blood panged through the air with martyrs' silent screams And fallen saints and angels tumbled from a nightmare's dream. The prophecy approaches near; that time is coming soon, And yet so many souls are lost into impending doom. Drunk with painful pleasure, demons roamed through Satan's call, For they were once angelic but their sins have made them fall. Promised with Earth's riches, men have hailed the Dragon's reign, But their eyes have been deceived, and instead their souls were slain. The diabolic message is that Satan rules through sin And the men who follow darkness are the ones enchained to him. The Devil rules our earthly world, and we must flee from vice, Before the mighty Serpent tempts our lives away from Christ. How fallen all these people are! The Devil binds them tight! He keeps them in the darkness so they'll never find the light. But if persistence proves to save them ere the rapture's start, We'll fill their souls with Yahweh's light, and love shall fill each heart. But now I know how Jesus felt when He had seen mankind With evil in their paths of life, no wonder they were blind! They turned away from God, our Lord, our haven safe to dwell, And there the nightmare then remains, with Earth as living Hell.
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RE: Share what you've written - 11/4/2005 1:46:50 PM
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ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooohhhhhhh!!!!! Sirach, those blew me away. I especially loved "Lullaby." Thanks so much for sharing them here! Everybody keep it up! And remember that anything you've written can be posted here. It doesn't need to be prose.
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