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RE: Share what you've written - 10/12/2005 6:17:29 AM   
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poor Travis.

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/16/2005 9:11:32 PM   
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c'mon people... post!

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/16/2005 9:28:37 PM   
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o lala!

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/16/2005 11:41:04 PM   
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don't feel like doin homework... humm some possible exucse:

I was late to school
Because my mule
broke his leg
on a giant keg
and for a ride I had to beg...?

Umm... the dog ate my math...! yeah
Sis put my lit in the... um BATH!?


Yeah that's a poem... lol! Maybe I should just do my homework. (don't know if teachers would fall for that) although one time my cat shreaded up my math worksheet and I had to take a photo of it for the teach and do it over... lol
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/17/2005 8:25:52 PM   
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okay, Gil, here it is... I wrote this song pretty recently. and it's kind of long... but yeah. it's this idea that I've had for a while that's grown from some conversations with friends about the nature of true love. we have such a disney-oriented culture, with this idea of love being this wonderful thing that happens when you're infatuated with someone. and the idea that after twenty years of marriage if you don't feel like newlyweds there's something wrong with your relationship. the actuality that lifelong love only comes from growing together with the other person is so far removed from our reality. and there's that... but also, sometimes I just think "I just want a chance to actually love somebody!" I feel so ready for that kind of commitment; I really want it a lot. and I've tried for a while to write a poem about it, but I just couldn't organize it all properly. so it definitely turned into a song. but yeah... no title. maybe "love". I'm actually kind of unhappy with the last line of the first chorus (each one changes slightly), but I can't find anything that I like with the right amount of syllables, so for now it works.

my heart is longing for a chance
to blossom and to grow beyond
the regions I have known in this
my lonely state of existence

my heart is capable of loving
it's waiting to absorb and give
the love I want much more than I
could possibly put into words

I want to know love
forget simplistic infatuation
the childish ideals we all cling to
of love
growing from being enamored with someone
when really it grows from two hearts
sharing life with each other
love's so much deeper
than feelings could measure
and I'm ready for it

to know the feeling of forever
to look into your eyes and say
"I love you" and to realize it
means so much more than a friendship

to really truly love you
and not just the idea of loving you
but something real
something tangible I can hold on to

I want to know love
forget simplistic infatuation
the childish ideals we all cling to
of love
meaning always admiring your lover
or feeling the same way towards her
as the day you first met
love isn't stagnant, it grows and it changes us
right along with it

we sing about it
write about it
seach for it in everything
dream about it
fight about it
but do we know what it really means?

I want to know love
not just simplistic infatuation
the cheap imitations I'm offered
of love
being this cosmic mysterious stranger
or worse, nothing more than a bed
shared between two companions
love is commitment, not champagne and roses
are you ready for it?


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RE: Share what you've written - 10/19/2005 1:12:15 PM   
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wow Lydia that is awesome!!! Ditto to ur view on love there and a deal is a deal so ill find something to post. lol

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/19/2005 1:38:45 PM   
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Yay for valuing commitment and determination, action with thought, over "simplistic infatuation." I loved it, Lyd.

Here's what happens when I get melodramatic:

Pen and Prose and the Rain Tonight

It's dark, still and raining
a night much like the one
that saw us torn apart
Hey, I might dislike change
but do you love it enough
to see me written out of
every script and page?
I torment and love and think
so much of me goes into wishing you well
oh but do you think of me?
As I write to ease and help
the flow of painful eagerness
from myself-
would you care that i write?
Do you wish to see what I write?
I would give so much
for you to love that I sit
that I anguish
that I write.

If I could write you into being
the very stuff of my dreams
there would be not much of a change
your face would be fair still
your build not quite tall but dear
The only alteration would be the shape
of your arms- they would arc
to fit my form
your eyes would see the world-
wet now, a layer of rain to plaster
gold and red and brown pieces of summer
to the cold and bitter laughing ground-
and they would see its beauty built
to showcase my every thought.
Ohhh the tender shape of your lips
they would part slighlty smile slightly
sigh slightly welcoming my sight.
Not much would be different
but everything would lift....
colours would be not of death
but of the dearest season.

You know you don't know
If you can see life
forever with me in it-
But how do you see so easily
a life with me forever absent?
Every time you think of life
beyond what we have for each other
you banish me to my imagination
this horrid place with pen and paper
and prose seperating me from my
fullest dreams.

I have a few others that I like the titles of, but I can't share because they're too personal: Everything I Love and Hate Here, and Harmony and Entropy.

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/19/2005 5:01:17 PM   
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(((whisper))) I really liked that poem. It showed your feelings so well that it made my heart ache for you.

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/19/2005 5:55:54 PM   
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quote:

ORIGINAL: greenish

okay, Gil, here it is... I wrote this song pretty recently. and it's kind of long... but yeah. it's this idea that I've had for a while that's grown from some conversations with friends about the nature of true love. we have such a disney-oriented culture, with this idea of love being this wonderful thing that happens when you're infatuated with someone. and the idea that after twenty years of marriage if you don't feel like newlyweds there's something wrong with your relationship. the actuality that lifelong love only comes from growing together with the other person is so far removed from our reality. and there's that... but also, sometimes I just think "I just want a chance to actually love somebody!" I feel so ready for that kind of commitment; I really want it a lot. and I've tried for a while to write a poem about it, but I just couldn't organize it all properly. so it definitely turned into a song. but yeah... no title. maybe "love". I'm actually kind of unhappy with the last line of the first chorus (each one changes slightly), but I can't find anything that I like with the right amount of syllables, so for now it works.

my heart is longing for a chance
to blossom and to grow beyond
the regions I have known in this
my lonely state of existence

my heart is capable of loving
it's waiting to absorb and give
the love I want much more than I
could possibly put into words

I want to know love
forget simplistic infatuation
the childish ideals we all cling to
of love
growing from being enamored with someone
when really it grows from two hearts
sharing life with each other
love's so much deeper
than feelings could measure
and I'm ready for it

to know the feeling of forever
to look into your eyes and say
"I love you" and to realize it
means so much more than a friendship

to really truly love you
and not just the idea of loving you
but something real
something tangible I can hold on to

I want to know love
forget simplistic infatuation
the childish ideals we all cling to
of love
meaning always admiring your lover
or feeling the same way towards her
as the day you first met
love isn't stagnant, it grows and it changes us
right along with it

we sing about it
write about it
seach for it in everything
dream about it
fight about it
but do we know what it really means?

I want to know love
not just simplistic infatuation
the cheap imitations I'm offered
of love
being this cosmic mysterious stranger
or worse, nothing more than a bed
shared between two companions
love is commitment, not champagne and roses
are you ready for it?



I love this


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RE: Share what you've written - 10/22/2005 12:38:24 AM   
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iceywarm
leaves of green
fun, frolicking, fabulous
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/22/2005 1:25:40 AM   
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quote:

your eyes would see the world-
wet now, a layer of rain to plaster
gold and red and brown pieces of summer
to the cold and bitter laughing ground


Jill-- I love that line. and I like the poem too. it actually reminds me of 'just walking around' by John Ashbery in some abstract way... your lines just brought to mind...

"What name do I have for you?
Certainly there is no name for you
In the sense that the stars have names
That somehow fit them. ..."

don't ask me why. lol.

and I'm glad y'all like the song. generally I feel like I'm in the minority with that position.

here's a random poem that I actually titled...

unanswered

tonight I went out
to look at the stars.
the moon shone brightly
but the sky was swirled with clouds.
I counted six stars
and went back indoors
with tears in my eyes
because you did not answer my email.


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RE: Share what you've written - 10/22/2005 12:27:13 PM   
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Took me a while to find one that I kind of like.. :-P

Beautiful

I smile as you look at me
It feels as if everything were exposed
I don't mind, because I trust you
I long for your eyes to stay looking in to mine forever
You make me feel beautiful

You laugh and smile
I do the same
What is time when I'm with you
I wish forever could be spent like this
You make me feel beautiful

I dance and sing
You watch and then join in
Life is just a happy poem
You and me creating the best story
You make me feel beautiful

More and more I'm with you
Becoming part of you and you part of me
It's a love that's binding and strong
As you speak and tell me your heart, I realize
That I am, indeed beautiful

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/22/2005 12:56:03 PM   
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Wow, Greenish, I really like that John Ashbery line too. I saved it in notebook on my computer . I'm going to have to hunt down that poem.

I like your poem "unanswered"- it does what some of my favourite poems do. It ties in what you look at/feel/smell, etc. to what's going on in your head, but it doesn't explain that tie. Sometimes poems are more effective without the "and that reminded me, somehow". Like yours :). Actually, it feels like a poem I would be very happy to have written, haha. I want to steal it now

And Miss Amanda- I don't know why I didn't figure you for a poet. At whatever rate, I was wrong! First poem I've read of yours and I absolutely love it! I'm a sucker for effective repetition- and I like that you altered it slightly for the last line. It's just such a nice lift to the poem to go from feeling beautiful to being beautiful. It makes me want to know what inspired the poem!

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/22/2005 1:25:31 PM   
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And I really like that haiku? Purity.... I'm really bad at remembering the structure to those smaller forms!!

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/23/2005 3:26:53 AM   
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I like some of your poems. I love poems about God and His love
I've writen a few, but I'm not good at poetry
so don't expect much.


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The Lord will come to you, no matter what.
He will save you, no ands ifs or buts.
All that he asks is that you believe.
Believe that he is real and that he loves you an me.
Believe with all your heart that he died for you.
And tell him that you believe the bible is true.
Ask him to forgive you and live in your heart.
And the Son will come free you, and never will he part.
After this is completed, your free now, you’re done.
Jesus will always protect you from the evil one.
And now, dear friend, know this as well.
You will never have to set foot in that firey place called Hell.
For Heaven is your new home, a grand place for you to stay.
The Lord created it for you, and this I will pray.
That amongst all the beauty, the love and the glee.
We will meet again up there, and for all eternity.
Hold your new savior close to your heart.
Love him deeply and truly, and he will never part.
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/23/2005 3:37:01 AM   
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Here's a poem I wrote tonight. Not the greatest, but oh well. I rarely like my poems.

Longing to Give

my love runs so deep
i just long to offer
a piece of myself
anything to make you
happy
yet all i do
is never enough
in my own eyes
i’m so envious
of you
i wish so badly
that i could touch you
the way you touch me
but i could never
match you
you may not see things
the same way
but my bitter heart
says i’m not
enough

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Can I still pray when I look in your eyes
Stare right back down
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RE: Share what you've written - 10/23/2005 2:34:09 PM   
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quote:

ORIGINAL: whisper

And Miss Amanda- I don't know why I didn't figure you for a poet. At whatever rate, I was wrong! First poem I've read of yours and I absolutely love it! I'm a sucker for effective repetition- and I like that you altered it slightly for the last line. It's just such a nice lift to the poem to go from feeling beautiful to being beautiful. It makes me want to know what inspired the poem!


Awww.. I'm full of surprises.

The inspiration is a sad story... But at one point I thought we really loved each other. Guess it's just supposed to be for memory's sake.

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/23/2005 3:10:53 PM   
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I found that Ashbery poem in a collection the name of which I can't remember at the moment. but if you want I can note the whole thing to you... just can't post it here because of copyright issues.

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RE: Share what you've written - 10/31/2005 12:14:23 AM   
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Trouble Is

the trouble is learning to lead
when what I want to do is lean
You see me as dependable
predictable sturdy, your girl
but not your love
because you lost that long ago
it has slowly diffused
melted into comfort from passion
into you and me from us
and your smile still takes me
but I can't let myself drift too far
because I need to go about this business
of industry and inferiority on my own.

Matinee

Dark movie theatres are dangerous places
when there's only an armrest in between
me and what I desire the most
between me and what frustrates me the most.
I want to strangle him then kiss him-
I want to be able to walk away from him
maybe make a scene and spill his rootbeer
but if I'm honest I'm closer to closing my eyes
breathing in the familiar scent, loving it.
Why do I have to love the darkness
the closeness to someone who has already chosen?
It is a guilty pleasure, a lonely meeting
both for you and me.
You love the proximity but not the commitment
I just full out love the man beside me.
So we sit- we don't touch, but we both want to.
A matinee of a movie neither of us wanted to see
a few old men sitting scattered
alone in the rows in front of us.
I sigh.

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RE: Share what you've written - 11/3/2005 11:52:43 PM   
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Writing is such a release for me. I write about the situation I feel I can't let go, and then when it's cemented in journal and poem, I pray for the release and forgiveness I desire. So there is a lot that I have written that would lead one to believe I'm a bit of a melodramatic maniac. But bear with the relational poetry. I'm in a big transition phase of my life and I often need to write to let go.

Expense

Stability at an expense.
Love scorned for a summer's pay
In some no name town-
A safe distance from your life's desire,
from that beautiful mystery of the insecurable;
A heart beating in independence from your own.

Cast Off

"I really enjoy this"
you hold my hand
smile sadly
you've already decided
against the union, against the future
fear stands in this strangely infinite space
between your dear sad face and mine.
"I really miss you"
spoken wishfully.
I think so often of the times
the words that warmed my core
brought colour to my cold cheeks
and feeling to my toes.
You speak of love, of happiness
and even now you're letting go
figuratively of course
but the grip you've placed
on my fingers
is only the final grasp
of a stone to be thrown
a burden cast off.
The pain in your eyes-
i don't understand this finality
this is what you have chosen.
Your certainty is matched
with my furvour
and this painful goodbye
is set to repeat itself
in the dark theatre
of nights spent
alone.

City Lights

I wonder why the city lights always shimmer from a distance
coming close they are nothing but dirty luminescent spheres
there is nothing mystical in the way they burn
but from a distance they are stars
and they remind me of you
and of the night they palely lit your face
as you told me you couldn't be mine.

Perfect Love

It is not truly love
until it is love without fear of loss.
Do I believe this?
You say again
perfect love drives fear away.
Love is perfect.
Can I be loved perfectly?

< Message edited by whisper -- 11/4/2005 12:23:10 AM >


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RE: Share what you've written - 11/4/2005 3:09:29 AM   
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Awww, whisper, those are beautiful. (((((Whisper)))))

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RE: Share what you've written - 11/4/2005 8:06:06 AM   
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There are alot of beautiful poetry here!!

Here are mine. Although it is not good, some of them I like, my style tends to be rhyming, so... enjoy . I have one more, but it's Marian and long, so these are sufficient.


I Thank Thee, Lord

I thank Thee, Lord, for many things which Thou hast given me:

My breath, that waketh me each day,
Mine eyes, that I can see.

I thank Thee for mine ears, O Lord,
That hear Thy peace on Earth,

And for my mouth to bring Thee praise in sadness and in mirth.

I thank Thee for mine hands, O Lord, that they may lift in prayer,
And for my knees, that they may kneel in humble love and care.

I thank Thee for my legs and feet upon Thy holy ground,
And for mine head to rise in faith, when hardships bring me down.

I thank Thee for my body, Thy reflection men do see
And in my final hour, Lord, may I return to Thee.

I thank Thee, Lord, that Love can fill this little heart of mine,
But most of all, I thank Thee that forever, I am Thine.


Lullaby

The stillness of the passing river,
Throughout the valleys and mountains green,
Carries the passive moon of silver
As the bright reflection does flicker
The vivid rays of a moonlit stream.

And then the moon bids its own farewell
And disappears in the dawning sky.
The morning light lures a magic spell
Of twilight as the charm shall quell
The spirits of the mortal realm so nigh.

The sun peaks into the break of day
To paint the world a brilliant gold
As hope and love flow in every way
And happiness sings the night away
As children of the earth unfold.

The dusk ascends as day becomes slumber
In which the wind sings an ancient song,
A melody of of ambient wonder
To lull a child from endless thunder,
For in the stillness, nothing goes wrong.

Sleep, my child, among stars in the air
And let the wind carry every dream,
Where life is joyful, mirthful and fair
Within the safe arms in which I bear,
And forever, peace shall smile and beam.


Amazing Is This Love of His


Amazing is this love of His,
That He should die for all,
As He atoned for every sin
By every strike and fall.
So destined for this Roman death,
We wonder at this loss
As Jesus walked on Calvary
To bear His wooden cross.

Along this road, His knees gave way
And Jesus then fell down.
But soldiers watched His every step
And pulled Him from the ground.
He saw His mother crying so,
That death would take her Son.
But deep within, all knew from there,
He was the Chosen One.

Barefoot upon the solid earth,
Our Simon helped on trail,
And sweet and dear Veronica
Then wiped His face by veil.
He fell again, but quickly rose
As counsel never came,
And gave His comfort to the women
Grieving just the same.

Much closer to the foot of death,
He fell for one more time,
And by His strength, He reached the top
To die for love sublime.
The soldiers stripped His garments off
And laid His body down
Upon the solid, wooden cross
That rested on the ground.

With every nail, He took the pain
And blood ran from each hand.
The thorns that pierced His holy head
Was placed in their demand.
If He was crowned with thorns for me,
Then kings of earth should flee,
For none are worthy by His Love
That set us captives free.

At last, the cross was raised up high,
That tree that held His life.
His spirit left His body and
He died to end all strife.
His body then, was taken down,
Entombed by all who mourned
In hopes that God took care of Him
When He was mocked and scorned.

Then Jesus rose from death's cold hands
And He did live again
As testimony of His kingdom
'Mongst all sinning men.
Behold, our Christ victorious
As Royal Majesty,
For this fulfilled the scripture of
His death on Calvary.

Amazing is this love of His,
That He should die for all,
As He atoned for every sin
By every strike and fall.
So destined for this Roman death,
We wonder at this loss
As Jesus walked on Calvary
To bear His wooden cross.


Fallen Revelation

I thought about the Lord each night and what He planned for me,
But I just couldn't place of where my life was meant to be
And so I came to church one night, and kneeled right down and prayed,
And by the Holy Spirit's sight, I saw the ones unsaved.

In the vigil of my prayers, I began to think in dread,
For God sent me impressions of all sinners to my head.
Their wickedness, iniquities, and emptiness they'd keep
And filled with my compassion, my devotion made me weep.

I saw the peoples all around the world in Satan's bond;
This was a Hell within the Earth that all had looked upon.
The sins of Sodom and Gomorrah rose into its reign,
As darkness taught their hearts to fear, and dwell in what was bane.

I saw the rapists' pleasure and their wicked, chosen fate,
And saw the bombing warheads of the nations filled with hate,
The children and their grieving, left abandoned there to die
In lands diseased with famine's plague; I heard my own heart cry.

The gamblers I have seen, corrupted from their riches vast,
Knew not with Jesus Christ, that earthly treasures never last.
Their hearts were full of emptiness, and never satisfied,
And yet they took up frailties of their greedy selfish pride.

I saw the ones intoxicated, poisoned in surprise,
And saw the many, tangled in their giant web of lies.
The youth became deceived by him, the prince of Hell's domain
And by the Tempter's influence, his darkness would remain.

The bloodshed and the murders struck a chord inside my heart,
For wickedness held strong to them with vengeance playing part.
Corrupted ones, the cheaters and the liars had no guilt
And men with these foundations are destroyed from whence they're built.

And then I saw these fortune tellers, thinking that it's right
To use these tools of Satan, finding futures through insight.
There's witchcraft working through our world; they praise their gods of stone,
And practice magic incantations God detests alone.

The scent of blood panged through the air with martyrs' silent screams
And fallen saints and angels tumbled from a nightmare's dream.
The prophecy approaches near; that time is coming soon,
And yet so many souls are lost into impending doom.

Drunk with painful pleasure, demons roamed through Satan's call,
For they were once angelic but their sins have made them fall.
Promised with Earth's riches, men have hailed the Dragon's reign,
But their eyes have been deceived, and instead their souls were slain.

The diabolic message is that Satan rules through sin
And the men who follow darkness are the ones enchained to him.
The Devil rules our earthly world, and we must flee from vice,
Before the mighty Serpent tempts our lives away from Christ.

How fallen all these people are! The Devil binds them tight!
He keeps them in the darkness so they'll never find the light.
But if persistence proves to save them ere the rapture's start,
We'll fill their souls with Yahweh's light, and love shall fill each heart.

But now I know how Jesus felt when He had seen mankind
With evil in their paths of life, no wonder they were blind!
They turned away from God, our Lord, our haven safe to dwell,
And there the nightmare then remains, with Earth as living Hell.



< Message edited by Sirach -- 11/4/2005 8:08:55 AM >


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RE: Share what you've written - 11/4/2005 1:46:50 PM   
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ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooohhhhhhh!!!!!

Sirach, those blew me away. I especially loved "Lullaby." Thanks so much for sharing them here!

Everybody keep it up! And remember that anything you've written can be posted here. It doesn't need to be prose.

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RE: Share what you've written - 11/4/2005 3:15:42 PM   
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Jill, I LOVE those poems. and sirach, you have a great grasp of meter-- I also love lullaby.

I'm thinking about what to post.


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RE: Share what you've written - 11/4/2005 4:25:29 PM   
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Sirach, those are amazing. Thanks for sharing

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