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IceQueen15 -> RE: Share what you've written (5/27/2008 12:01:20 AM)
oh ok.. so... everything going ok over there?

jesusfreak94 -> RE: Share what you've written (5/27/2008 12:04:58 AM)
what do ya mean?

DreadPirateRandy -> RE: Share what you've written (5/27/2008 12:14:03 AM)
This is nothing special. Maybe I'll expand it into an actual something someday. I woke up one morning to find the life I knew a forgotten nightmare. A path once walked altered to a new reality of things. A wind of change stirred up the calm sea, and life reoccured inside of me.

IceQueen15 -> RE: Share what you've written (5/27/2008 12:17:32 AM)
quote: ORIGINAL: jesusfreak94 what do ya mean? i mean how r u and everything? did i offene u? i didnt mean 2 if i did =(

jesusfreak94 -> RE: Share what you've written (5/27/2008 12:25:50 AM)
ha um no. how would that offend me?? i just didn't know wat you meant when you asked me... and i'm doin pretty good. :]

IceQueen15 -> RE: Share what you've written (5/27/2008 12:28:15 AM)
oooh ok well for me i'm sleeeeeeppppyyyy..

jesusfreak94 -> RE: Share what you've written (5/27/2008 12:33:51 AM)
ha we might wanna take this convo to the chat thread

christiangirl0920 -> RE: Share what you've written (5/27/2008 11:04:22 AM)
okay, here's some stuff i've written recently. lemme know if it's good or not or if there's anything you think i could do in revisions or adding. this is my song Shades of Gray. It's 2 am and I can't get to sleep. I get out of bed and turn on the tv. The volume's loud but I can't here a thing. I'm busy thinking and it's hard to believe what this world is coming to, people abandoned, neglected, abused. I fall to my knees, my face on the ground. I start to pray as the tears poor down. Lord help us all. We've gone too far, we've been lead astray. Taught by tv we rely on the media. Black is not black and white is not white. Instead there's shades of gray between what's wrong and what's right. "This just in folks, we have breaking news," says the reporter. "A man was shot dead in his home off of Lane Avenue". How many robberies or murders must we see on tv before we realize life is not free. We take things for granted, we sin and don't care but one day we will pay. When we stand before the Book of Life on our judgment day.

jesusfreak94 -> RE: Share what you've written (5/27/2008 11:50:34 PM)
here are a few of my other poems. i don't really have any names for em so here ya go.... left alone in the rain i cannot see you everything is covered in fog nothing can be seen clearly trying to escape my on my own only leaves me in a deeper hole than i was so dazed and confused Lord will you forget me always? how long do i have to be on my own? my desperate attempts to reach out are vain falling to the ground i weep through the tears and dust i look up and i see you standing there with your arms wide open my sins, my evil deeds every sin of mine brings another stripe upon your back the scars on my wrist, the thorns in your brow still you love me still you choose to save me weeping i fall to your feet it is your love that i seek lovingly you draw me in, scars and all sitting at your feet i feel a presence a love it is the love of a God Love of a Savior Love of a father Love of a king Love of my Lord. searching for something more knowing there has to be more than this i search in every corner all my results ending in vain in a last attempt to find life, i cry out to you. though uncertain whether you're there i poor my soul out to you the more i give into you the clearer you become as the fog rolls away i see you. what i see is hte image of perfect love beyond compare beyond measures what i see is new life.

PrincessButtercup -> RE: Share what you've written (5/27/2008 11:52:15 PM)
I done told ya, Sara Bear, but i likes em. [;)]

jesusfreak94 -> RE: Share what you've written (5/27/2008 11:54:10 PM)
and i already told YOU panda. thankies muchly. :]

violinist_for_jesus -> RE: Share what you've written (5/28/2008 12:50:13 AM)
quote: ORIGINAL: christiangirl0920 okay, here's some stuff i've written recently. lemme know if it's good or not or if there's anything you think i could do in revisions or adding. this is my song Shades of Gray. It's 2 am and I can't get to sleep. I get out of bed and turn on the tv. The volume's loud but I can't here a thing. I'm busy thinking and it's hard to believe what this world is coming to, people abandoned, neglected, abused. I fall to my knees, my face on the ground. I start to pray as the tears poor down. Lord help us all. We've gone too far, we've been lead astray. Taught by tv we rely on the media. Black is not black and white is not white. Instead there's shades of gray between what's wrong and what's right. "This just in folks, we have breaking news," says the reporter. "A man was shot dead in his home off of Lane Avenue". How many robberies or murders must we see on tv before we realize life is not free. We take things for granted, we sin and don't care but one day we will pay. When we stand before the Book of Life on our judgment day. I must say that you have the beginning of a great song. Do you happen to have music for it yet?

IceQueen15 -> RE: Share what you've written (5/28/2008 2:57:54 AM)
here's a poem i made. Along The Beach The Lord said Come unto me those who are weary, worn, weak, and anybody in troubles and tribulations so they can know that I am there to save them and wash there sins away and I say but what if they don�t believe me? What shall we do? And the Lord said it�s there choice if they don�t believe you then it�s there choice they can either decide or accept. Then I said Jesus, Your right. But what if they still don�t believe me when I tell them that you died for them and was buried and rose again on the 3rd day so they could live!!?? Then Jesus said you are only a messager of God I�ll do the work! And then I said Thank u God your so Wonderful then lots of questions started to pop in my head of doubt, fear, sadness, worry, all of the things that made me kind of sad and really worried but Jesus said cast all your cares on me and I said I don�t want to hurt u Jesus you�re a great friend! Why must I cast my cares upon u I mean would that hurt??? And Jesus said Yes it would but I am doing it so u can live and be carefree I loved u that I died for u and when I died for u It did hurt me but I did it so u could live u had many sins but I crucified them and they washed away and on the ocean floor! And then I said well� ok I just don�t feel so sure� I mean I�m starting to doubt and so many things r like popping in my head what do I do Lord??? And The Lord said cast your cares upon me and don�t doubt think of what I have done for u and what I did, the miracles I did, the teachings. And then I started to think of them and I was so happy but then I saw the waves of doubt coming in to take me away into the ocean of fear but Jesus stood in front of the waves and said Go! And the waves went. And I was saved by Jesus. And I said Jesus sometimes I worry that I�m not going to heaven or like worried if I�m saved or not is that a good thing? And the Lord said that shows you�re saved. And I said Oh Thank You, Thank You! And then Me and the Lord walked along the beach and we talked and talked and I felt so much better because I felt that somebody was actually there for me! And when the Lord saw how much I loved talking to Him now he said Thank u for talking to me you�re a Great friend 2, and I said So r u and it seems right now I want to be more then friends now. And the Lord said That�s Great! And I said I want to be Best friends now I hope its ok with u Lord and the Lord answered with a smile. And we walked along the side of the beach.

christiangirl0920 -> RE: Share what you've written (5/28/2008 11:36:28 AM)
quote: quote: ORIGINAL: christiangirl0920 okay, here's some stuff i've written recently. lemme know if it's good or not or if there's anything you think i could do in revisions or adding. this is my song Shades of Gray. It's 2 am and I can't get to sleep. I get out of bed and turn on the tv. The volume's loud but I can't here a thing. I'm busy thinking and it's hard to believe what this world is coming to, people abandoned, neglected, abused. I fall to my knees, my face on the ground. I start to pray as the tears poor down. Lord help us all. We've gone too far, we've been lead astray. Taught by tv we rely on the media. Black is not black and white is not white. Instead there's shades of gray between what's wrong and what's right. "This just in folks, we have breaking news," says the reporter. "A man was shot dead in his home off of Lane Avenue". How many robberies or murders must we see on tv before we realize life is not free. We take things for granted, we sin and don't care but one day we will pay. When we stand before the Book of Life on our judgment day. I must say that you have the beginning of a great song. Do you happen to have music for it yet? no, not yet. i mean, i do have a melody when i sing it. but i don't have any intruments other than my voice. maybe i could send the recording to you and you could put some music to it.

violinist_for_jesus -> RE: Share what you've written (5/28/2008 5:49:24 PM)
I could do that.

IceQueen15 -> RE: Share what you've written (5/28/2008 6:58:11 PM)
did anybody like my poem? [:(]

christiangirl0920 -> RE: Share what you've written (6/2/2008 10:48:32 AM)
i liked it cassie. it reminded me of the poem footprints.

IceQueen15 -> RE: Share what you've written (6/2/2008 6:05:20 PM)
oh. thanks. [:)]

_MavericK_ -> RE: Share what you've written (6/3/2008 3:52:26 PM)
i like cookies i like cake i love it when mah people bake i like to mooch i like to sneak in stealing sweeties i can't be beat so keep yer boys and keep yer brood chapffft--- forget love: i'll fall in chocolate food!

whisper -> RE: Share what you've written (7/4/2008 1:18:18 AM)
Here's something I wrote a few years ago, I think when I was in a bout of frustration over being unable to change my boyfriend into the him I knew he could be. The poem reveals both my frustration at his lack of change and my realization that my efforts were silly and futile and unnecessary. Awomanfeelsinclinedtochangeaman My cryptic darling, falsehood in your eyes despite sincerity voiced. Narcotic need to see you transformed- there's an unearthed beauty oh, I know there's beauty. How much I would dig; most likely proportional to how much you would hide. Your playlists can only reveal so much: An affinity for Nick Cave contrasts Great Big Sea. It casts me into fancied narrations, I drown in possible interpretations of who you may be, may become. I persist despite ample calls to reason- "A man exists, independent of what woman thinks of him." All good and well and yet I exist dependent solely on what he thinks of himself. ::js::9.12.2006::

whisper -> RE: Share what you've written (7/9/2008 4:04:30 AM)
quote: How in this world Can we put a man on the moon And still have a need For a place like St. Judes And why is one man born In a place where all they know is war A guy like me, Has always been free And how can two people Who built a loving home Try for years And never have a child of their own And somewhere out there tonight There is a baby no ones holding tight In need of love To me that don't add up But I wasn't there the day you filled up the ocean I didn't get to see you hang the stars in the sky So I don't mean to second guess you Or criticize what I don't understand These are just a few questions I have And why did my cousin Have to die in that crash A good kid Only seventeen I still wonder 'bout that It seems unfair to me Some get the chance to chase their dreams And some don't What do I know I wasn't there the day You filled up the ocean I didn't get to see You hang the stars in the sky So I don't mean to second guess You Or criticize what I don't understand These are just a few questions I have Why do I feel like You hear these prayers of mine When so many aughta be Ahead of me in line When you look down on me Can you see the good through all the bad These are just a few questions I had How did I miss this while reading way back when? This is great! I love how the thoughts are clearly communicated and sophisticated despite the frequent use of very informal language. I like how the stories are told in little descriptive snippets. This would be a fabulous song.

beachcooky -> RE: Share what you've written (7/12/2008 1:38:04 AM)
Death in Disguise Death walked in the door wearing a disguise Drugs is what he gave my friend causing his demise They found him laying on the floor alone in a motel But he left his memory here, and I can't say farewell Tonight he fills my memories and sick is what I feel A death grip he has on my heart , no peace so I can heal Emptiness is what he left and the future is bereft He stole my friends immortal soul like a common theft Demons that have tortured ,so cruel and so maligned Plagued and abused my friend until he lost his mind I don't think I'll forgive him for leaving me on that day Leaving me with memories I'll never chase away He was more then just a friend a brother he was to me I feel a loss so painful , of his memories I can't break free The image of that night is stuck inside my head Laying dead and on his face terror ,fear and dread

kaoru -> RE: Share what you've written (7/16/2008 1:26:19 PM)
:/ that's rather sad.. . . . . . The Lonely Soul Sing to me from your heart Oh, quickly please take out these shards I have come to you please don't reject me I have chosen you to love me. Play me a tune Oh, quietly please end the hurt I cry for you please listen to me I need you to love me. Dance with me underneath the stars Oh, hold me please In your arms I pray for you please don't go so far I miss you so love me. Laugh with me because this world is too hard Oh, talk to me please don't you know I'd die for you? please never let me go would you love me?

whisper -> RE: Share what you've written (7/17/2008 3:26:34 AM)
Kaoru - I like the repetition and form. Is this going to be a song? It would go so well to music.

DreadPirateRandy -> RE: Share what you've written (8/3/2008 7:04:08 AM)
A while ago, I posted a poem on this forum entitled "The Thief". Using scriptural references and such, I converted passage into a form of poetry. I felt writers itch, so I began writing another poem similar to "The Thief". The Wise and the Foolish (1 Corinthians 1:18-31) For the message of the cross is foolishness to those who are perishing, A heart so cherishing is nothing but famishing, deprived of the bread and wine that Christ is bearing. The intelligence of the intelligent will become frustrated, with a heart so jaded, intended for love but have turned to hatred. Where is the wise man? Where is the scholar? Where is the philosopher? Where is the love for the aborted sons and daughters? Has not God made foolish the wisdom of the world? For the foolishness of God is wiser than man's wisdom, Not many of are wise by human standards, but hollow and numb. Through foolishness of what was preached saved those who believe, We preach Christ crucified, the One who set captives free from hurt and the tangled webs we weave. That is our righteousness, holiness and redemption, Through the blood of Christ you have been given the right to eternal exemption. Has not God made foolish the wisdom of the world? Therefore, as it is written: "Let him who boasts boast in the Lord."

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