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RE: Share what you've written - 5/27/2008 12:04:58 AM
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jesusfreak94
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what do ya mean?
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RE: Share what you've written - 5/27/2008 12:14:03 AM
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This is nothing special. Maybe I'll expand it into an actual something someday.
I woke up one morning to find the life I knew a forgotten nightmare.
A path once walked altered to a new reality of things.
A wind of change stirred up the calm sea,
and life reoccured inside of me.
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RE: Share what you've written - 5/27/2008 12:17:32 AM
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ORIGINAL: jesusfreak94
what do ya mean?
i mean how r u and everything? did i offene u? i didnt mean 2 if i did =(
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RE: Share what you've written - 5/27/2008 12:25:50 AM
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jesusfreak94
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ha um no. how would that offend me?? i just didn't know wat you meant when you asked me... and i'm doin pretty good. :]
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RE: Share what you've written - 5/27/2008 12:33:51 AM
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jesusfreak94
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ha we might wanna take this convo to the chat thread
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RE: Share what you've written - 5/27/2008 11:04:22 AM
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christiangirl0920
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okay, here's some stuff i've written recently. lemme know if it's good or not or if there's anything you think i could do in revisions or adding.
this is my song Shades of Gray.
It's 2 am and I can't get to sleep.
I get out of bed and turn on the tv.
The volume's loud but I can't here a thing.
I'm busy thinking and it's hard to believe
what this world is coming to,
people abandoned, neglected, abused.
I fall to my knees,
my face on the ground.
I start to pray as the tears poor down.
Lord help us all.
We've gone too far, we've been lead astray.
Taught by tv we rely on the media.
Black is not black and white is not white.
Instead there's shades of gray
between what's wrong and what's right.
"This just in folks, we have breaking news,"
says the reporter.
"A man was shot dead in his home off of Lane Avenue".
How many robberies or murders must we see on tv
before we realize life is not free.
We take things for granted,
we sin and don't care
but one day we will pay.
When we stand before the Book of Life
on our judgment day.
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RE: Share what you've written - 5/27/2008 11:50:34 PM
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jesusfreak94
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here are a few of my other poems. i don't really have any names for em so here ya go....
left alone in the rain
i cannot see you
everything is covered in fog
nothing can be seen clearly
trying to escape my on my own only leaves me in a deeper hole than i was
so dazed and confused
Lord will you forget me always?
how long do i have to be on my own?
my desperate attempts to reach out are vain
falling to the ground i weep
through the tears and dust i look up
and i see you standing there with your arms wide open
my sins, my evil deeds
every sin of mine
brings another stripe upon your back
the scars on my wrist,
the thorns in your brow
still you love me
still you choose to save me
weeping i fall to your feet
it is your love that i seek
lovingly you draw me in,
scars and all
sitting at your feet
i feel a presence
a love
it is the love of a God
Love of a Savior
Love of a father
Love of a king
Love of my Lord.
searching for something more
knowing there has to be more than this
i search in every corner
all my results ending in vain
in a last attempt to find life,
i cry out to you.
though uncertain whether you're there
i poor my soul out to you
the more i give into you
the clearer you become
as the fog rolls away
i see you.
what i see is hte image of perfect love
beyond compare
beyond measures
what i see is new life.
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RE: Share what you've written - 5/27/2008 11:54:10 PM
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jesusfreak94
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and i already told YOU panda. thankies muchly. :]
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RE: Share what you've written - 5/28/2008 12:50:13 AM
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quote:
ORIGINAL: christiangirl0920
okay, here's some stuff i've written recently. lemme know if it's good or not or if there's anything you think i could do in revisions or adding.
this is my song Shades of Gray.
It's 2 am and I can't get to sleep.
I get out of bed and turn on the tv.
The volume's loud but I can't here a thing.
I'm busy thinking and it's hard to believe
what this world is coming to,
people abandoned, neglected, abused.
I fall to my knees,
my face on the ground.
I start to pray as the tears poor down.
Lord help us all.
We've gone too far, we've been lead astray.
Taught by tv we rely on the media.
Black is not black and white is not white.
Instead there's shades of gray
between what's wrong and what's right.
"This just in folks, we have breaking news,"
says the reporter.
"A man was shot dead in his home off of Lane Avenue".
How many robberies or murders must we see on tv
before we realize life is not free.
We take things for granted,
we sin and don't care
but one day we will pay.
When we stand before the Book of Life
on our judgment day.
I must say that you have the beginning of a great song. Do you happen to have music for it yet?
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RE: Share what you've written - 5/28/2008 2:57:54 AM
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IceQueen15
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here's a poem i made.
Along The Beach
The Lord said Come unto me those who are weary, worn, weak, and anybody in troubles and tribulations so they can know that I am there to save them and wash there sins away and I say but what if they don’t believe me? What shall we do?
And the Lord said it’s there choice if they don’t believe you then it’s there choice they can either decide or accept. Then I said Jesus, Your right. But what if they still don’t believe me when I tell them that you died for them and was buried and rose again on the 3rd day so they could live!!?? Then Jesus said you are only a messager of God I’ll do the work!
And then I said Thank u God your so Wonderful then lots of questions started to pop in my head of doubt, fear, sadness, worry, all of the things that made me kind of sad and really worried but Jesus said cast all your cares on me and I said I don’t want to hurt u Jesus you’re a great friend! Why must I cast my cares upon u I mean would that hurt???
And Jesus said Yes it would but I am doing it so u can live and be carefree I loved u that I died for u and when I died for u It did hurt me but I did it so u could live u had many sins but I crucified them and they washed away and on the ocean floor!
And then I said well… ok I just don’t feel so sure… I mean I’m starting to doubt and so many things r like popping in my head what do I do Lord??? And The Lord said cast your cares upon me and don’t doubt think of what I have done for u and what I did, the miracles I did, the teachings.
And then I started to think of them and I was so happy but then I saw the waves of doubt coming in to take me away into the ocean of fear but Jesus stood in front of the waves and said Go! And the waves went. And I was saved by Jesus. And I said Jesus sometimes I worry that I’m not going to heaven or like worried if I’m saved or not is that a good thing? And the Lord said that shows you’re saved. And I said Oh Thank You, Thank You! And then Me and the Lord walked along the beach and we talked and talked and I felt so much better because I felt that somebody was actually there for me!
And when the Lord saw how much I loved talking to Him now he said Thank u for talking to me you’re a Great friend 2,
and I said So r u and it seems right now I want to be more then friends now. And the Lord said That’s Great! And I said I want to be Best friends now I hope its ok with u Lord and the Lord answered with a smile. And we walked along the side of the beach.
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RE: Share what you've written - 5/28/2008 11:36:28 AM
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christiangirl0920
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quote:
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ORIGINAL: christiangirl0920
okay, here's some stuff i've written recently. lemme know if it's good or not or if there's anything you think i could do in revisions or adding.
this is my song Shades of Gray.
It's 2 am and I can't get to sleep.
I get out of bed and turn on the tv.
The volume's loud but I can't here a thing.
I'm busy thinking and it's hard to believe
what this world is coming to,
people abandoned, neglected, abused.
I fall to my knees,
my face on the ground.
I start to pray as the tears poor down.
Lord help us all.
We've gone too far, we've been lead astray.
Taught by tv we rely on the media.
Black is not black and white is not white.
Instead there's shades of gray
between what's wrong and what's right.
"This just in folks, we have breaking news,"
says the reporter.
"A man was shot dead in his home off of Lane Avenue".
How many robberies or murders must we see on tv
before we realize life is not free.
We take things for granted,
we sin and don't care
but one day we will pay.
When we stand before the Book of Life
on our judgment day.
I must say that you have the beginning of a great song. Do you happen to have music for it yet?
no, not yet. i mean, i do have a melody when i sing it. but i don't have any intruments other than my voice. maybe i could send the recording to you and you could put some music to it.
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RE: Share what you've written - 6/2/2008 10:48:32 AM
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christiangirl0920
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i liked it cassie. it reminded me of the poem footprints.
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RE: Share what you've written - 6/3/2008 3:52:26 PM
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i like cookies
i like cake
i love it when
mah people bake
i like to mooch
i like to sneak
in stealing sweeties
i can't be beat
so keep yer boys
and keep yer brood
chapffft--- forget love:
i'll fall in chocolate food!
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RE: Share what you've written - 7/4/2008 1:18:18 AM
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Here's something I wrote a few years ago, I think when I was in a bout of frustration over being unable to change my boyfriend into the him I knew he could be. The poem reveals both my frustration at his lack of change and my realization that my efforts were silly and futile and unnecessary.
Awomanfeelsinclinedtochangeaman
My cryptic darling,
falsehood in your eyes despite sincerity voiced.
Narcotic need to see you transformed-
there's an unearthed beauty
oh, I know
there's beauty.
How much I would dig; most likely proportional
to how much you would hide.
Your playlists can only reveal so much:
An affinity for Nick Cave contrasts Great Big Sea.
It casts me into fancied narrations,
I drown in possible interpretations
of who you may be, may become.
I persist despite ample calls to reason-
"A man exists, independent of what woman thinks of him."
All good and well and yet I exist
dependent solely on what he thinks of himself.
::js::9.12.2006::
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RE: Share what you've written - 7/9/2008 4:04:30 AM
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whisper
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How in this world
Can we put a man on the moon
And still have a need
For a place like St. Judes
And why is one man born
In a place where all they know is war
A guy like me,
Has always been free
And how can two people
Who built a loving home
Try for years
And never have a child of their own
And somewhere out there tonight
There is a baby no ones holding tight
In need of love
To me that don't add up
But I wasn't there the day you filled up the ocean
I didn't get to see you hang the stars in the sky
So I don't mean to second guess you
Or criticize what I don't understand
These are just a few questions I have
And why did my cousin
Have to die in that crash
A good kid
Only seventeen
I still wonder 'bout that
It seems unfair to me
Some get the chance to chase their dreams
And some don't
What do I know
I wasn't there the day You filled up the ocean
I didn't get to see You hang the stars in the sky
So I don't mean to second guess You
Or criticize what I don't understand
These are just a few questions I have
Why do I feel like
You hear these prayers of mine
When so many aughta be
Ahead of me in line
When you look down on me
Can you see the good through all the bad
These are just a few questions I had
How did I miss this while reading way back when? This is great! I love how the thoughts are clearly communicated and sophisticated despite the frequent use of very informal language. I like how the stories are told in little descriptive snippets. This would be a fabulous song.
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RE: Share what you've written - 7/12/2008 1:38:04 AM
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Death in Disguise
Death walked in the door wearing a disguise
Drugs is what he gave my friend causing his demise
They found him laying on the floor alone in a motel
But he left his memory here, and I can't say farewell
Tonight he fills my memories and sick is what I feel
A death grip he has on my heart , no peace so I can heal
Emptiness is what he left and the future is bereft
He stole my friends immortal soul like a common theft
Demons that have tortured ,so cruel and so maligned
Plagued and abused my friend until he lost his mind
I don't think I'll forgive him for leaving me on that day
Leaving me with memories I'll never chase away
He was more then just a friend a brother he was to me
I feel a loss so painful , of his memories I can't break free
The image of that night is stuck inside my head
Laying dead and on his face terror ,fear and dread
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RE: Share what you've written - 7/16/2008 1:26:19 PM
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:/ that's rather sad..
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The Lonely Soul
Sing to me
from your heart
Oh, quickly please
take out these shards
I have come to you
please don't reject me
I have chosen you
to love me.
Play me
a tune
Oh, quietly please
end the hurt
I cry for you
please listen to me
I need you
to love me.
Dance with me
underneath the stars
Oh, hold me please
In your arms
I pray for you
please don't go so far
I miss you
so love me.
Laugh with me
because this world is too hard
Oh, talk to me please
don't you know
I'd die for you?
please never let me go
would you
love me?
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RE: Share what you've written - 7/17/2008 3:26:34 AM
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whisper
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Kaoru - I like the repetition and form. Is this going to be a song? It would go so well to music.
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RE: Share what you've written - 8/3/2008 7:04:08 AM
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A while ago, I posted a poem on this forum entitled "The Thief". Using scriptural references and such, I converted passage into a form of poetry. I felt writers itch, so I began writing another poem similar to "The Thief".
The Wise and the Foolish (1 Corinthians 1:18-31)
For the message of the cross is foolishness to those who are perishing,
A heart so cherishing is nothing but famishing, deprived of the bread and wine that Christ is bearing.
The intelligence of the intelligent will become frustrated, with a heart so jaded, intended for love but have turned to hatred.
Where is the wise man? Where is the scholar? Where is the philosopher?
Where is the love for the aborted sons and daughters?
Has not God made foolish the wisdom of the world?
For the foolishness of God is wiser than man's wisdom,
Not many of are wise by human standards, but hollow and numb.
Through foolishness of what was preached saved those who believe,
We preach Christ crucified, the One who set captives free from hurt and the tangled webs we weave.
That is our righteousness, holiness and redemption,
Through the blood of Christ you have been given the right to eternal exemption.
Has not God made foolish the wisdom of the world?
Therefore, as it is written: "Let him who boasts boast in the Lord."
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