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RE: Share what you've written - 12/27/2005 11:45:27 PM
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christiangirl0920
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the second one was kinda gloomy. but beautiful at the same time.
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/28/2005 12:34:25 AM
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Talia
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karou - I love Battousai X - Rurouni Kenshin, it the best Anime ever. I love what you've written.
Faxy, I love the second poem.
Ok I've just written this (like 5mins ago) and there's no name, as yet.
Wretched am I
to have thought
that things
have changed
The smell,
The color,
The essence,
All brings back distant
memories
I'm lost
caught up between blurred lines
What is past?
What is present?
How I long for change
To be dressed in new skins
To feel new emotions
To renew my thinking
Not to remember
Where I've been
But to see only lights
Only color
And visions of glory.
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To see the world in a grain of sand, and a heaven in a wild flower, Holds infinity in the palm of your hand, and eternity in an hour. - William Blake
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/28/2005 10:37:01 AM
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christiangirl0920
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that was really good. i think i'm better at doing goofy poems than actual serious ones.
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/28/2005 11:44:44 AM
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mini_chic
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that was good. Ya'll are awesome writers. I'm not exactly the greatest at writing poems, but I do like to write stories. I haven't written any in awhile, tho. But if I do write something that I think is good, I'll post it on here to see what ya'll think.
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/28/2005 12:36:56 PM
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kaoru
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quote:
karou - I love Battousai X - Rurouni Kenshin, it the best Anime ever. I love what you've written.
it isn't like i was stealin it or anything lol i right a lot of fanfiction
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/28/2005 2:55:57 PM
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Silverflame180
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Very beautiful, Just_ressurected and shadowfax :0)
kaoru, you're a good writer too :0) I like writing stories, but Im not very good at suspense or action, hehe. You did a good job though keeping up the suspense and you leave a little mystery so we dont know what's happening next, so it holds our attention. Good job. :0)
And thnx for all the positive feedback, shadowfax and Sirach and everyone else. :0) You all have great talent. I love all of your poetry especially, Sirach. I can tell that you're going to be a writer (Er... are a writer, but you know what I mean ;0) )
Keep up the nice work pplz :0)
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/28/2005 2:59:18 PM
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Silverflame180
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Oh, and I know exactly what you mean, whisper, and I hate when that happens! I get some of my greatest ideas when I'm thinking right before I go to sleep, but you're too tired to actually write it down and then you can't remember it after.... It's annoying, lol. But you should try and write it down anyway. Sometimes it turns into something cool even if it's not completely the same. :0)
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/28/2005 5:07:53 PM
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kaoru
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ASH!!! i am wanting to here what happens to Ryu!!!
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/28/2005 8:03:43 PM
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whisper
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My first attempt at writing a song. I'm working on the second verse right now but here's the lyrics to what I have so far (rhyming is difficult!)
Devil's own.
Odd how often I bear that title.
Oh never underestimate the power of your words,
best you leave that darted tongue idle.
The mic is on,
your captive audience is here listening.
Do what it takes to calm your nerves,
then light it up- my ears are tingling.
chorus:
And I don't think you understand
the way your phrases are killing me
I would take silence over hurtful reprimand
Give me some reason to believe I have worth
or please just kindly let me be
your voice- it stays with me.
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/28/2005 10:36:21 PM
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kaoru
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i love it Jill i just love it, keep workin on it if that isn't all cause i wanna here the rest
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/28/2005 10:45:19 PM
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Silverflame180
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Nice, whisper. I like it very much.
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RE: Share what you've written - 12/29/2005 9:33:37 PM
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mini_chic
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That's really good, Whisper. I can't wait to read the rest.
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RE: Share what you've written - 1/1/2006 7:58:33 PM
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Silverflame180
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Here's one I found a few days ago that I wrote about a year ago and completely forgot about..... I wanted to change the first two lines, but it is what it is for now I guess. And it's not *really* totally based on my life, it's just kinda one of those things that I thought of and wrote down at the moment. *Anywho*....For now it's called "Truth"....
Walls of rain shut me in my world
They keep you from reaching me
Pain. Reflection.
Is this all there is to live for?
An open sky, an insecure heart.
I’m watching for my miracle.
Peace. Sustain.
Your time is yet to come.
Hide here in the shadows now.
The pain won’t find you there.
Sigh. Kneel.
You’ve died again tonight.
Torn apart with a fading soul.
Broken in every way.
Tired. Cry out.
Take me now or let me die.
Slowly, shadows start to break.
To light dark must surrender.
Rest. Mend.
Know that I am God.
I renounce you, world I knew.
You gave me only pain.
Silent. Hollow.
I know you by your scars.
These you gave me as remembrance.
It’s love that washed them from me.
Assurance. Beckons.
I serve a new truth now.
You laughed when I lay broken.
You sneered the day I died.
Darkness. Pain.
That’s your truth I’ve found.
But light reveals all lies and chains,
Once hidden in the dark.
Truth. Hope.
I trust in only One.
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RE: Share what you've written - 1/1/2006 9:43:57 PM
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mini_chic
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Yes, that was an awesome poem. You should write poetry when you grow up.
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RE: Share what you've written - 1/1/2006 10:25:38 PM
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whisper
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Silver, that blew my socks off. In my top 10 poems I've read on crosswalk for sure.
I've read a LOT of amazing poems here, so that's saying a lot.
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RE: Share what you've written - 1/1/2006 10:36:10 PM
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whisper
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Warning! Whisper is about to make another attempt at rhyming poetry (Whisper doesn't rhyme. Whisper DOES talk about herself in third person using her CW Alias. But rhyme she does not):
Love like Words
How painlessly at times
this closeness falls aside
And I guess this is what Mom always told me
would be the cost of growing up.
You can stay a little while
we'll just sit and watch the tide
and I guess this is how we will proceed
our love, like my words now- stuck.
Don't feel a need to explain this,
we've philosophied time and again.
There's an amber glow on the passing clouds
look to that to ease your pain.
How pretty is this passing moment
how perfect this little stony beach
and maybe somewhere back there we lost it-
our love like words now out of reach.
But it's alright
and you will go on
to see other pretty beaches
with a pretty little wife.
Ya, we're alright
and you will move on
to see other pretty beaches
from a better place in life
- you're alright.
edited to add: you know that didn't even rhyme in places. Ah well, I wrote it explicitly to practice rhyming, so I certainly DID practice...
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RE: Share what you've written - 1/1/2006 11:28:32 PM
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Talia
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Thanks for your kind words guys.
Silver flame that poem is amazing.
Whisper, the song lyrics really rox, and the last poem I did like.....alot, even if wasn't completely a rhyming poem lol.
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To see the world in a grain of sand, and a heaven in a wild flower, Holds infinity in the palm of your hand, and eternity in an hour. - William Blake
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RE: Share what you've written - 1/1/2006 11:43:08 PM
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Talia
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Well this is another no name poem... oh well.
How cold and swift
The wind blows
In the dark night
How I long to see
The shimmering moon light
That would light the path
Which I must follow
Oh, how it blows
Hear the rustling of leaves
That hides the sound
I yearn to hear.
How I wish for it to stop
This cold, rush of air
That chills my soul.
Oh, that night would
Turn into day
Cold wind into warm breeze
With sounds of chirping birds
Filling the air
No shadows
No mysteries
Pure clarity
Straight path.
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To see the world in a grain of sand, and a heaven in a wild flower, Holds infinity in the palm of your hand, and eternity in an hour. - William Blake
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RE: Share what you've written - 1/2/2006 4:47:13 PM
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Silverflame180
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Awwe, thanks everyone. :0) And I am 18
I like both of those Whisper and Talia. Much beautious :0D
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RE: Share what you've written - 1/5/2006 1:25:53 PM
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whisper
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Rebellion Songs
From the stage he sings revolution
songs against the state, he takes a stand-
and the crowds amass to sing along
sporting grimaces and anarchist wristbands.
Anger is fashion, hear rebellion in the key of G.
All these buzzwords can bring down the establishment,
Just make sure you buy the CD.
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RE: Share what you've written - 1/5/2006 5:33:12 PM
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inlovewithshadowfax
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Haha. I so love that poem, Whisper.
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To break these chains
Can I still pray when I look in your eyes
Stare right back down
Into something beautiful
~"Something Beautiful"- Jars of Clay~
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RE: Share what you've written - 1/6/2006 3:22:18 PM
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mini_chic
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me too. lol
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RE: Share what you've written - 1/7/2006 1:43:41 PM
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kaoru
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this isn't from me but i found it on the net and i just loved it
"Do not stand at my grave and weep, I am not there, I do not sleep. I am a thousand winds that blow, I am the diamond glint on snow. I am the sun on ripened grain, I am the soothing, gentle rain. When you awake in morning hush, I am the swift uplifting rush of quiet birds in circled flight. I am the stars that shine at night. Do not stand at my grave and cry, I am not there ... I did not die." -Aerith FFVII
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